User blog comment:Magicboots/Check It Out..... Maybe?/@comment-3517755-20110426193153

I think it's a really good start to something big. The opening leaves a lot to wonder about, and people at first would think "Is this about Sam...?" because a lot of fanfictions are dramatic and Sam-based, but, BOOM, it's Carly instead. Maybe a little more imagery and descriptive words would make it flourish a bit more, but otherwise I think you're off to a good start.