User blog comment:EClare Fan/Seddie Story:)/@comment-2246006-20100919235900/@comment-2246006-20100920001422

It has potential. It's very random, though. Why would Carly suddenly poke Sam and ask her if she liked someone? Also, why would Freddie, in response to Sam asking him to do something, laugh and put his head on her shoulder?

And...why in the world did he randomly kiss her? Things are just very random in your story, and none of the actions that happened were explained.

And I forgot to mention this earlier, but your spelling isn't the best. I recommend writng this on Word Perfect (or whatever you have on you computer/laptop) first and THEN uploading it to this site after you check it for spelling and gramatical errors. You might also want to consider having a second person proofread it for you.