Talk:Seddie/@comment-2140103-20110203060723/@comment-3174012-20110203064015

nice, it was very well written. I had to skim it (sorry I will read it again.) It's quite touching, but the only thing I"m lost at is the time span. I don't really understand 100% what happens. Next time use bold/ dashes to separate times so it's easier for the readers. (can u post a summary of the timeline and what happens?)

It's quite well written, especially for a one-shot. The story evokes emotions and nice imagery. Keep up your writing! You certainly have talent!